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(10/12/01 10:43 pm)
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Another Untitled
10/11/01 10:01 P.M.

Withered petals
Fall silently to the ground
And the fierce winds
Howling sound
Spreading its fury
With the dead on its wing
The songs are gone
That the birds would sing
The cycle of death is present once more
Reaplced with cold
Is the heat the world once bore
That once beautiful world shall always die


10/12/01 12:51 P.M.

Withered, lifeless petals
Float peacefully to the ground
And the fierce wind
With its howling sound
Spreading its fury
With the dead on its wing
The songs are gone
That the birds would sing
The cycle of death is present once more
And we are left to wonder
To what this is all for.
Since no matter what we try
Our beautiful world shall always die

Any suggestions for a title are greatly appreciated.

Larson Sier

"Lost in a world of doubt and insecurity. Nothing that you hold sacred, nothing you believe. Life is a contradiction, while you thrive on manipulation. I fight to just hold on to what I believe! I wont become thing thing I hate! I wont become you! You've treated me like I'm a worthless peice of shit. You think you're in control but you make me sick. I want to watch you suffer, the way that you made me suffer. I want to suck on everything you've ever loved!! I won't become the thing I hate. I won't become you! I won't become the thing I hate. I won't become you"-Stabbing Westward

"Staring at the sea. Will she come? Is there hope for me, after all I've said and done? Anything at any price. All of this for you. All the spoils of a wasted life. All of this for you. All the world has closed her eyes. Tired faith all worn and thin. For all we could have done, and all that could have been. Ocean pulls me close, and whispers in my ear. The destiny I've chose. All becoming clear. The currents have their say. The time is drawing near, washes me away, makes me dissappear. And I descend from grace in arms of undertow. I will take my place, in the great below!" -Nine Inch Nails

"So you want tell you the story of my life?"

Rinoa Triste 
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Posts: 67
(10/14/01 12:25 pm)
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Re: Another Untitled
I like it but i think that the first part is better i just dont think the line 'With its howling sound' goes very well i suppose you could re-phrase it differently or something...

but besides that i think its very good ^.^

~*Rin*~

In space the stars are no more nearer they just glitter like a morgue.

Dont ask me anything: Im just an artist.

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