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vivad
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(8/8/03 17:56)
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The Golden Kiss
The Golden Kiss

Kiss of life, Kiss of death
Kiss and let me do the rest.
Kiss of fate, Kiss of hate
Kiss before it gets to late.
Kiss the earth, Kiss the sky
always stop to wonder why.
Kiss a friend, never end
pucker up and Kiss again.
Kiss long, Kiss on
listen to its slippery song.
Kiss cool, Kiss kind
Kiss and warm a lonely mind.
Kiss a check, once a week
Kiss even in your sleep.
Never rest, thats the test
Kiss each time the very best!
Kiss and make, Kiss and take
a heart is always there to break.
Kiss an enemy, Kiss a friend
it'l come back in the end.
Kiss of strife, Kiss of spice
make it a way of life.
Kiss and hear, in your ear
TIME TO KISS A GOLDEN BEER.
Kuranui
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(2/28/04 20:10)
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Re: The Golden Kiss
This is a very loving poem.I do not usually like the repetition of a word, but it seems to work in this piece.
Two small things you may want to edit....in the 4th line the word"to" should rightly be "too"
In 5th line from the end ....one "l" left off "It'll".:eek

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